Week 6 Peer Review Worksheet 

Use the table below as you conduct the Week 6 Peer Review. Your grade for this discussion will be derived from your work on the peer review you perform. You may not begin performing your peer review until you have made your own main post (your draft and your goals). Once you have completed the peer review, reply to your classmate’s main posts by attaching this completed peer review sheet, along with any comments you would like to make.

Student you are reviewing: _______Amtul Mahmood______

Your name: ___________Nila Dhungana________

Element  Comments or Suggestions for Improvement 

Please compose at least three full sentences for each element (many elements will likely be longer once you begin explaining and offering feedback). Be specific, adding examples and suggestions where needed.

Structure and Unity: Is the thesis statement narrow and clearly arguable? Do the points in the body and the content of the conclusion clearly support the thesis statement? Please be specific and offer reasons, suggestions and examples.    The work is well structured however the thesis statement is not clear. The first paragraph provides the general idea about the paper and I trust this is what makes the thesis statement. The work is well coordinated and the idea flows from the beginning to the end of the paper well.

Organization: Look at the ordering of body paragraphs and at the ordering of sentences within the introduction, body paragraphs, and conclusion. Is everything arranged in the most effective order for you, as a reader? Please be specific and offer suggestions, reasons, and examples.   The order is okay however just a few corrections like some of the ideas in the first paragraph should be in the body. The same applies for the last paragraph where there are many points which should be in the body.

Voice: Is the writer’s voice the driving force of the essay? Is each paragraph written with the writer’s voice from the first to the last sentence? Is the writer using voice to connect and explain the evidence used? Could the writer do more to expand on the evidence, to argue for the value or meaning of the evidence? Please be specific and offer suggestions, reasons, and examples.   The voice is okay

Flow: Does each sentence flow smoothly from one to the next for the reader? Does each paragraph? As the reader, do you feel guided by the writer’s words? Do you sense any missing connective elements that would make the essay more reader-friendly? Please be specific and offer suggestions, reasons, and examples.   The flow of the work is perfect

Introduction and Conclusion: Has the writer employed the most effective methods for writing this introduction and conclusion? Consider the techniques we have studied, pointing out what works well and why and what could be done better and why/how. Please be specific and offer suggestions, reasons, and examples.      Introduction and conclusion need to be improved

Source Use: Do the sources work well to support the points in which they are used? Run a quick source evaluation, using the CRAAP test. Then, are sources integrated smoothly, and does the writer make the connections between the sources and the writer’s arguments clearly?  Please be specific and offer suggestions, reasons, and examples.   The sources are used well

Argument Technique: Comment on the effectiveness of the argument techniques you see in the essay, such as logos, ethos, pathos, kairos, and elements of the Toulmin model. Also, comment on any logical fallacies you see. Finally, comment on the argument genres you notice and on how well the writer has employed those. Please be specific and offer suggestions, reasons, and examples.     The argumentative techniques help to achieve the communicative goal of the essay in a specific manner.

Please note any errors in grammar, spelling, APA document format, APA in-text citation, and APA Referencing.   Grammar and APA referencing and formating are perfect and good

Do you have any other suggestions for improving this paper?   no

 *You are not required to attach a marked-up copy of your peer’s draft, but you may also do so if you would like.