You need to pick one overall subject and talk about it in-depth. Right now you are switching from topic to topic without one overall theme that organizes this paper. I would limit your discussion to just looking at drug use and the stress of college students, or limit your paper to discussing just the ides of how men and women function inside and outside of the classroom and if college favors one gender over another. Currently there are just too many topics being discussed. Your introduction needs to address what you are going to talk about in your paper and then introduce your reader to that topic. You then need to discuss that topic in the body paragraphs of your paper. Your conclusion should include your opinion and summarize all the main points.and i want the question at the end like paragraph after the interdiction and u should what u will talking about in the interdiction.